How do you write a poem? Where do you begin? I learned long ago from working with children writers that they are full of ideas. I wrote an article for the National Writing Project journal The Quarterly in 2005 when it was still in print titled “Writing with William.” (I was pleased to find it on a Google search.) In the article, I described a tutoring experience that led me to understand young writers need tools, not ideas, structures, not prompts. When I was talking with Ava Haymon, our state poet laureate, last weekend about writing ideas for students, she said a technique that she likes to use is repetition.
Using Ava’s poems as models, I introduced this structure to 6th graders at our monthly enrichment day we call WOW (Way out Wednesday.) “The Child Born” begins each line with the same three words, “The child who.” I asked the students to listen for the details. Following the reading, we did a memory test. “What did you remember?” While they didn’t quite understand the poem, they did remember almost every line, especially “The child who bites cuticles instead of fingernails,” and “The child who sucks her hair at night.” Details are memorable. Another model I used was Betsy Franco’s “Fourths of Me” from The Poetry Friday Anthology for Middle School.
Then I gave them the assignment: Write about whatever you want to, but begin each line or each stanza in the same way. Examples: Before, Everybody, As long as, The child who, Anyone, Who, Why, I am. The students also added beginnings to the list.
This was a successful lesson because everyone wrote a poem. Even the kid who said he hates writing poems. Even the one who said she has never written a poem before. After writing, we shared and did a memory test for each other’s poems. They realized the importance of using specificity and original ideas to draw a reader’s attention.
What Do You See?
When you see the stars, you see the sky
But when I see the stars, I see the days passing by.
When you see the beach, you see grains of sand.
But when I see the beach, I see a place untouched of man.
When you see the ocean, you see fish and pearls.
But when I see the ocean, I see an underwater world.
When you see a child, you see a small man.
But when I see a child, I see a gift from God’s hands.–Kaley
Before and After
After the sun sets at night,
After the bud blooms,
After the plane takes off in flight,
I’ll go home to my room.Before the sun rises at dawn,
Before dew forms on the flower,
Before the bird lands in its nest,
The king will give up his power.This time I will not stay silent,
This time I will speak.
This time I will not be shy,
This time I’ll be bold.–Ethan
My Dream
I am the frail one.
I am the fragile one.
I am the annoying one.
I am the one in the back of the classroom.
I am the new student.
I am the one no one wants around.
I am the dumb one.
I am the one nobody talks to.
I am the runt of the litter.
I am the timid one
Only in my dreams.–Jack
What a great idea! I love reading repetition, now to write some. Thanks, Margaret!
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These are fabulous poems, Margaret — your young poets really got the hang of using memorable details!
I was amazed at how simply drawing attention with the memory test made them more aware of writing details. I think this lesson is a keeper!
I’m going to save these for when I need a place to start! Thanks for sharing the talent of your young writers.
I didn’t post mine because the kids’ were so good, but I felt successful, too.
Your students are lucky to have you sharing your love for poetry. Repetition is where poetry really started, isn’t it? Incantatory language – how lovely that kids really got into it. Nice work…and thanks for the post.
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How exciting to see that our book mentioned here (The Poetry Friday Anthology for Middle School)! I love the poem you highlighted from it, Betsy Franco’s “Fourths of Me”; it definitely is a great example of repetition. Your blog is a terrific resource–I enjoyed my visit!
You are one of my poet-heroes. Thanks for stopping by. The Anthology is a wonderful resource.
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