Dreams

March 5, 2013 by margaretsmn

Slice of Life Challenge Day 5

On Saturday, I attended the Acadiana Word Lab again. This was my third Saturday to attend. Each week is a new presenter, and each week, different people attend. I am meeting new people and learning to be braver with my writing. The point is to write a rough draft in response to the presenter’s prompts. We usually do 2-3 short writing periods. Then share…it’s all part of it. This weekend I felt intimidated by the confident writers I sat with. But when I read the following response, I heard someone whisper, “Excellent!” Wow! Just what I needed to hear that day. I’m not so sure this poem measures up to her exclamation, but I’ll take it anyway. The prompt was to write about a dream you never had.

The Dream I Never Had

I have never flown in my dreams.
I want to feel this free–
Oh, in the arms of Superman,
or on the magic carpet with Alladin,
on the wings of an eagle,
better yet–be the eagle–
soar, swoop,
slide across the clouds,
circle the moon.
Fly? Me? No!

I dream of children’s voices,
lost keys,
closed locks,
smothering.

My daughter once wrote a dream blog.
Her dreams were like wild fairy tales.
I want to dream like she dreams.

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Posted in Poetry, Slice of Life | Tagged Acadiana Wordlab, dreams, Poetry prompts | 9 Comments

9 Responses

on March 5, 2013 at 12:37 pm | Reply Clare L. Martin

Love it! So glad you were with us Saturday. It is a scary thing to group-write, but we support each other and we are all in the same situation.
on March 5, 2013 at 1:15 pm | Reply blkdrama

I love where you take us
My daughter once wrote a dream blog.
Her dreams were like wild fairy tales.
I want to dream like she dreams.
Keep them coming 🙂
Bonnie
on March 5, 2013 at 5:15 pm | Reply runningfancy

You’re an inspiration; I admire your courage. I don’t like to share my writing with anyone and kept an annonymous blog for a reason… This whole slicing thing is opening my eyes and giving me the confidence to get over my fears! Thanks for the share!
on March 6, 2013 at 12:52 am | Reply Paul

I like how you create momentum in your first stanza with a list and some alliteration. This sets up the contrast with the next stanza nicely. I wonder if links embedded in poems is going to be a wave of the future? 🙂
- on March 6, 2013 at 12:59 am | Reply margaretsmn
  
  I told my daughter about the poem so she sent me a link to her blog. She hasn’t written since 2006. The blog was a college class assignment. But I thought it was cool to put it in the poem.
on March 6, 2013 at 1:25 am | Reply Jaana

I don’t dream about flying either, but I do dream about students learning English! Thank you for sharing your writing!
- on March 6, 2013 at 1:29 am | Reply margaretsmn
  
  Do their voices echo in your head all night long?
  - on March 6, 2013 at 10:47 am Jaana
    
    Absolutely!
on March 6, 2013 at 1:34 am | Reply Linda Baie

I don’t dream much (or remember them), but this makes me want to, Margaret. It is beautiful, the parts you include, like flying with Superman, or on Aladdin’s carpet, being an eagle. What a dream that would be! And then to bring it down to the personal like your daughter’s dreams. I love it all!